Exercise 98

I have to say this was the biggest of help with my final draft of my paper. Since I already knew that I would at least need to go to the learning center to get the spelling, typos and run-on sentences taken care of I also needed to know the strongest and weakest parts of my story. With the in class writing circles really helped me on what I needed to take out, leave and what was confusing to the reader. The in class revision also helped me know that the plot was easy to follow and was app. topic to the reader.

Exercise 95

In exercise 95 I decided to try out. What events happened before the beginning of the story? Before page one. Write scenes of those events. How would they affect the story?

This exercise also helped me because when I was typing my second draft I noticed that some of my time line events didn't make sense to what was going on to the plot which was confusing me. So when I came to this exeercise I decided to write all the scenes out first then reconect them with transitions sentences which in the end my story easier to follow and I was able to take out those confusing events that I didn't even need in my story.

Exercise 89

Exercise 89

I have to say this exercise really helped me in making my story add a bit more detail and opening up the plot a little better. When I was writing my first draft I noticed that I had mostly summarized what the main character was looking at instead of giving the scene more detail and giving the reader something to visualize.

After doing this particular exercise I notice that my scenes in the story were becoming more realistic and interesting to read. The exercise on page 225 also gave me a chance to do add some more dialogue to my story which also gave it more detail.

The Skeleton Exercise

It was in the middle of Kyle’s last class, and was the end of the day. Kyle was very hungry. Not paying attention in class John was startled by a voice.

“So what’s the answer Kyle, Mrs. Field asked”.

Not playing attention John had a smart ass answer. “The answer to what?”

“Detention, the teacher replied”.

Muttering in his mind, Kyle knew he would have to wait even longer now to get a snack. After the class bell rang, and Kyle left the class room he gathered his books and started walking toward to detion hall until...

He was suddenly pushed by the school bully. “Loser, Eric shouted”.

With his books now scattered everywhere Kyle started to pick them up until he heard a voice.

“Want some help; it was Jenna his school crush.”

“Sure, Said John in a high pitches voice”.

After his books were picked up she quietly said bye. Before Jenna left Kyle finally got the courage he wanted to do for a long time.

“Jenna, John asked?”

“Yes.”

“Want to get some ice cream later?”

“Yes, she replied with a smile.”

“See after you get of detetion, she said smiling.”

“OK.”

As they departed Kyle walked to detention hall having to wait another 45 minutes to get some food. After Kyle finally got out of detention he met up with Jenna and the two headed towards the ice cream parlor. The two ordered and Kyle’s stomach was finally cured of hunger!

Exercise 43-45

As my phone beeps at six in the morning, I slowly awake not to wanting to wake up. Turning off my alarm, I go to back to sleep for another five minutes. Slowly waking back up, I started getting ready for work. After packing the rest of my lunch I hear a voice.
" Have a good day at work". My mom said.
"OK, thanks". I said.
After I headed out the door I started my car and headed towards work. As I pull into the grounds department at Midland Public School I walk into the break room and hear several voices.
"Hi"!
"Hello"!
"Sup"!. Several workers said.
"Hi"! I responded.
As seven approach I could see my boss coming into the break room to give us all the work where suppose to do for the day. My boss however, likes to go on random rants and usually likes to talk about the Red Wings and started talking about them.
" Did anyone catch the Red Wings game last night"? My boss said."
" No, did they lose"? I asked.
" No, they won damn it!" My boss said in a laughing tone.
"Wow, I'm shock a Michigan team that wins." I said.
" Alex, that's a bunch of bullshit, Joe said in a laughing tone.
As everyone laughed Joe told us what to do for the day and we were all off to work.

Story Idea 2

Here's my idea for my second story.

Plot- The plot circles around a struggling America Suburb family. After coming home after a normal business trip James learns that his father had just died of heart attack. Already feeling apart from his own family due his intense work hours, James decides that he is going to drive his family to the funeral to try and save his marriage and connection with his kids. However, his wife is having secret affairs and his teenage daughter is pregnant without his father knowing. Meanwhile his son had just gotten into West Point despite his father disapproval of his son joining the military.
On the journey to his father funeral we take a look at other families flashback to see how they got to where they are today and how they use their dark secrets of the past to rebuild their loving relationships.

Character Introduction

Here's my main character introduction I like it so far but may change feel free to leave any suggestions!!

Luke is the typical average Joe. Just in his 30's Luke seem to be planning his life they way he always wanted it to had a beautiful wife and a little girl. Luke was a architecture, or a construction which made him a very good living, and was also an ex- marine. After doing his morning exercise routine every morning Luke would make breakfast for his wife and daughter and pack her a lunch for school. By the time Luke had gotten all his morning chores done, he always fine time to go to church and thank God for the wonderful he has. Luke isn't a very fearful man only to not be able to protect his family if he would ever need to.
On the weekends Luke goes to the local YMCA to play pick up games of basketball with his friends from work and plays against other people of his community. All his friends like him, he's a good teamplayer always trying to help make somone better, always viewing him has loyal and someone they can count on. However the next day Luke's life would about to change forever....