Exercise 98

I have to say this was the biggest of help with my final draft of my paper. Since I already knew that I would at least need to go to the learning center to get the spelling, typos and run-on sentences taken care of I also needed to know the strongest and weakest parts of my story. With the in class writing circles really helped me on what I needed to take out, leave and what was confusing to the reader. The in class revision also helped me know that the plot was easy to follow and was app. topic to the reader.

Exercise 95

In exercise 95 I decided to try out. What events happened before the beginning of the story? Before page one. Write scenes of those events. How would they affect the story?

This exercise also helped me because when I was typing my second draft I noticed that some of my time line events didn't make sense to what was going on to the plot which was confusing me. So when I came to this exeercise I decided to write all the scenes out first then reconect them with transitions sentences which in the end my story easier to follow and I was able to take out those confusing events that I didn't even need in my story.

Exercise 89

Exercise 89

I have to say this exercise really helped me in making my story add a bit more detail and opening up the plot a little better. When I was writing my first draft I noticed that I had mostly summarized what the main character was looking at instead of giving the scene more detail and giving the reader something to visualize.

After doing this particular exercise I notice that my scenes in the story were becoming more realistic and interesting to read. The exercise on page 225 also gave me a chance to do add some more dialogue to my story which also gave it more detail.

The Skeleton Exercise

It was in the middle of Kyle’s last class, and was the end of the day. Kyle was very hungry. Not paying attention in class John was startled by a voice.

“So what’s the answer Kyle, Mrs. Field asked”.

Not playing attention John had a smart ass answer. “The answer to what?”

“Detention, the teacher replied”.

Muttering in his mind, Kyle knew he would have to wait even longer now to get a snack. After the class bell rang, and Kyle left the class room he gathered his books and started walking toward to detion hall until...

He was suddenly pushed by the school bully. “Loser, Eric shouted”.

With his books now scattered everywhere Kyle started to pick them up until he heard a voice.

“Want some help; it was Jenna his school crush.”

“Sure, Said John in a high pitches voice”.

After his books were picked up she quietly said bye. Before Jenna left Kyle finally got the courage he wanted to do for a long time.

“Jenna, John asked?”

“Yes.”

“Want to get some ice cream later?”

“Yes, she replied with a smile.”

“See after you get of detetion, she said smiling.”

“OK.”

As they departed Kyle walked to detention hall having to wait another 45 minutes to get some food. After Kyle finally got out of detention he met up with Jenna and the two headed towards the ice cream parlor. The two ordered and Kyle’s stomach was finally cured of hunger!

Exercise 43-45

As my phone beeps at six in the morning, I slowly awake not to wanting to wake up. Turning off my alarm, I go to back to sleep for another five minutes. Slowly waking back up, I started getting ready for work. After packing the rest of my lunch I hear a voice.
" Have a good day at work". My mom said.
"OK, thanks". I said.
After I headed out the door I started my car and headed towards work. As I pull into the grounds department at Midland Public School I walk into the break room and hear several voices.
"Hi"!
"Hello"!
"Sup"!. Several workers said.
"Hi"! I responded.
As seven approach I could see my boss coming into the break room to give us all the work where suppose to do for the day. My boss however, likes to go on random rants and usually likes to talk about the Red Wings and started talking about them.
" Did anyone catch the Red Wings game last night"? My boss said."
" No, did they lose"? I asked.
" No, they won damn it!" My boss said in a laughing tone.
"Wow, I'm shock a Michigan team that wins." I said.
" Alex, that's a bunch of bullshit, Joe said in a laughing tone.
As everyone laughed Joe told us what to do for the day and we were all off to work.

Story Idea 2

Here's my idea for my second story.

Plot- The plot circles around a struggling America Suburb family. After coming home after a normal business trip James learns that his father had just died of heart attack. Already feeling apart from his own family due his intense work hours, James decides that he is going to drive his family to the funeral to try and save his marriage and connection with his kids. However, his wife is having secret affairs and his teenage daughter is pregnant without his father knowing. Meanwhile his son had just gotten into West Point despite his father disapproval of his son joining the military.
On the journey to his father funeral we take a look at other families flashback to see how they got to where they are today and how they use their dark secrets of the past to rebuild their loving relationships.

Character Introduction

Here's my main character introduction I like it so far but may change feel free to leave any suggestions!!

Luke is the typical average Joe. Just in his 30's Luke seem to be planning his life they way he always wanted it to had a beautiful wife and a little girl. Luke was a architecture, or a construction which made him a very good living, and was also an ex- marine. After doing his morning exercise routine every morning Luke would make breakfast for his wife and daughter and pack her a lunch for school. By the time Luke had gotten all his morning chores done, he always fine time to go to church and thank God for the wonderful he has. Luke isn't a very fearful man only to not be able to protect his family if he would ever need to.
On the weekends Luke goes to the local YMCA to play pick up games of basketball with his friends from work and plays against other people of his community. All his friends like him, he's a good teamplayer always trying to help make somone better, always viewing him has loyal and someone they can count on. However the next day Luke's life would about to change forever....

Story Idea 1

Sorry its late but I'm still trying to come up with an original idea for my story but here's what I got so far. I'm thinking about writing about superheroes in today's modern time. I'm still working on the plot with several ideas stuck in my which I should pick the one I like by Friday. I haven't decided if I'm going to have the story focus more on the villain or the superhero and since most hero stories focus on the hero I think it would be cool the focus more on the villain.

Why I choose this exercise

I chose exercise 56 because I enjoyed closing my eyes and just visualizing a certain environment around me then writing it down. I thought this exercise was pretty easy as well especially if you were at that environment for long you can remember it like it was yesterday.This exercise also helped me to notice not only what surrounded me but noise, people and my reactions to my surrounding's.

Why I choose this exercise

Best, Favorite Exercise Page 56

I can remember it like it was yesterday. One of the worst jobs I had ever worked at which was at McDonalds for 3 1/2 years. Going into work I was surronded by food cooking, frying and coffee brewing. I was surronded by people of all ages and cultures around me. I can remember lobby being filled with customers and Drive Thru being lined to the road. One person who would always stand out would be my ex-boss because she would always be singing random songs while you were work, which was annoying because it would be in the middle of a rush. The sounds were annoying to everyday after work my ears would be ringing with the beeps of fryers and timers going off, and customers talking in the lobby.
Always smelt like french fries and hamburger meat everytime I went in for work and in the morning I would come across the smell of eggs, bacon, and hashbrowns. Ohhh! How I hated working there in the summer time it would get so hot that I would be covered in grease and sweat after a day in the grill, which was disgusting.
How I hated that job, the only thing I remember that I liked is all the friends I made while I worked there.I would always talk to my friends and managers that I liked when we wern't busy. I was always happy when I got out of work, I would go home take a shower then a nap after a long day. I did however like most of the people I worked with, and some I didn't care for.

The Character I came up with

Well the character I came up with was about someone I knew from grade school. Someone who I just remember well, why I don't know. After completing the exercise on page 27 I discovered I learned what his future life may look like just by making general observations about his past. What surprised me most about each exercise is how easy it will be to come up with characters I need for stories because I could just use people I knew from the past in future. Also I learned how to be more descriptive about making characters by developing more about there personality instead of what they look like which is what I normally do when writing papers.

Exercise 27

I think that in this persons refrigerator we would fine a lot of junk food and other unhealthy foods
because if his parents doesn't care of how he behaves around others then I don't think they will
care about his eating habits. In his closet it is probally messy with clothes that need wash, put in the hamper and some that need folding. In his car trunk I wouldn't at all be surpise to fine a baseball bat or a six pack of beer.

Writting Exercise 14

His name was Anthony it was pretty hard to forget this kid while I was and Elementary School. Anthony was never mean to me but was more of a mutual friend who I didn't even want to associate with because he was a bad egg at the time. Anyways Anthony was the school bully he lived in my neighborhood, rode the same school bus as me to school, and took same classes even in the same Sunday school church class.
I remembered that Anthony would always get in trouble in school for being disrespectful to students and teachers and on the way to school and home he would always set up in the front alone so that no one else would sit next to him. I remember him always being a spoiled brat as well always asking people how much things they bought cost and saying how his stuff is better than there’s because his cost more money.
I haven’t seen Anthony since I moved from Texas after sixth grade. I can imagine him ending up in jail for doing drugs or committing a crime because he always had bad behavior in school.